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    Lightbulb HAIKU ~ I stink, so you try...

    Just a reminder thanks to http://www.toyomasu.com/haiku/

    How to write Haiku
    In japanese, the rules for how to write Haiku are clear, and will not be discussed here. In foreign languages, there exist NO consensus in how to write Haiku-poems. Anyway, let's take a look at the basic knowledge:

    What to write about?
    Haiku-poems can describe almost anything, but you seldom find themes which are too complicated for normal PEOPLE's recognition and understanding. Some of the most thrilling Haiku-poems describe daily situations in a way that gives the reader a brand new experience of a well-known situation.

    The metrical pattern of Haiku
    Haiku-poems consist of respectively 5, 7 and 5 syllables in three units. In japanese, this convention is a must, but in english, which has variation in the length of syllables, this can sometimes be difficult.

    The technique of cutting
    The cutting divides the Haiku into two parts, with a certain imaginative distance between the two sections, but the two sections must remain, to a degree, independent of each other. Both sections must enrich the understanding of the other.
    To make this cutting in english, either the first or the second line ends normally with a colon, long dash or ellipsis.

    The seasonal theme.
    Each Haiku must contain a kigo, a season word, which indicate in which season the Haiku is set. For example, cherry blossoms indicate spring, snow indicate winter, and mosquitoes indicate summer, but the season word isn't always that obvious.

    Please notice that Haiku-poems are written under different rules and in many languages. For translated Haiku-poems, the translator must decide whether he should obey the rules strictly, or if he should present the exact essence of the Haiku. For Haiku-poems originally written in english, the poet should be more careful. These are the difficulties, and the pleasure of Haiku.
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    Ok, now that the instructions are out of the way, lets try...

    Lost is my son:
    Looking for his father in,
    the war of the day.


    Any more attempts?
    J. Alexander
    Namo Amitabha

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    What is that dim light?
    The dawn waking from night's pause,
    Or night creeping in.
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    Twin islands rising
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    Quote from David:
    Land ho, camel toe!
    20 minutes later I'm still ROTFLMAO!!!!!

    I conceed before even trying.
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    Three geese walk one spring
    into a bar-wait,this is
    haiku,not a joke
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    I am welcomed to
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    alone soon dead.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Kenshin Butsu
    The metrical pattern of Haiku
    Haiku-poems consist of respectively 5, 7 and 5 syllables in three units.
    Count, people. Count.

    If you translate a Japanese haiku into English you may lose the 5-7-5 meter of the original, but if you're writing an original one in English then it should follow the rule.
    Yours in Budo,
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    Default Snowbound

    Caveat--I actually write a bit of poetry.

    Snow silently falls
    Building a ghostly cocoon
    in the cold, dark night.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Brian Owens
    Count, people. Count.

    If you translate a Japanese haiku into English you may lose the 5-7-5 meter of the original, but if you're writing an original one in English then it should follow the rule.


    In japanese, this convention is a must, but in english, which has variation in the length of syllables, this can sometimes be difficult.


    Caveat: Over the years, I've actually had alot of poetry published....(snicker)


    Counting syllables?
    Like autumn leaves on the wind,
    poetry is free
    Aaron J. Cuffee


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